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    #1

    Improving the following paragraph

    Hi,
    Can someone help me improving the following paragraph ?

    M-Photo is a hi-tech company, established in early 2003, by 3 founders who bring a very broad background in the digital pre-press and digital photography markets, and in complex IT systems. The company has developed a comprehensive, vendor-independent, production floor management system and productivity tools for the Photofinishing marketplace. With the beginning of convergence between the Photofinishing and the Printing industry, the target market of M-Photo also includes print shops using advanced digital printing technology.

    For a company introduction download, please click here



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    Re: Improving the following paragraph

    Welcome to the forums

    Quote Originally Posted by drors View Post
    Hi,
    Can someone help me improving the following paragraph ?

    M-Photo is a hi-tech company, established in early 2003, by three founders who together havea very broad background in the digital pre-press and digital photography markets, and in complex IT systems. The company has developed a comprehensive, vendor-independent, production floor management system and productivity tools for the Photofinishing marketplace. With the beginning of convergence between the Photofinishing and the printing industry, the target market of M-Photo also includes print shops using advanced digital printing technology.

    For a company introduction download, please click here

    Not much change needed.

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    Re: Improving the following paragraph

    Thanks anglika,
    Can you review also the following one ?

    The Album maker utility is an add-on utility for the MPR500 Pro Production floor management system, and can be provided by the lab to its customers for the preparation of complete and customized albums electronically. The setup program for the customers is created by the lab, with building blocks that allow the customers to prepare the order. The utility comes in two versions: lab version and customer version. The customer version is used for creating the photo album as an electronic print order. The lab version is used for the preparation of the setup program of the customer version and for loading customerís order of an album, making additional modifications and sending to print.

    For more details: click here for the customer version and here for the lab version

    For a brochure download, click here

    Click here to send an e-mail if you have any additional questions

    You can download a free a demo version of this utility:

    • If you are already logged-in, click here.
    • If you are a registered customer, login first and then download the album maker demo from the Downloads section
    • If you are not a registered customer, please click here for a request to download - you will get back by e-mail regsitration information which will allow you then to download the album maker demo from the Downloads section


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    #4

    Re: Improving the following paragraph

    It looks fine to me.

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    Re: Improving the following paragraph

    May I make suggestions on the way it is presented?

    The Album maker utility(program?) is an add-on utility for the MPR500 Pro Production floor management system(, and). It can be provided by the lab to its customers for the preparation of complete and customized albums electronically.

    The setup program for the customers is created by the lab, with building blocks that allow the customers to prepare the order. The utility comes in two versions: lab version and customer version. The customer version is used for creating the photo album as an electronic print order. The lab version is used for the preparation of the setup program of the customer version and for loading customerís order of an album, making additional modifications and sending to print.

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