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    correction of sentences requested

    hiiii

    1.I called her up.but she was not ready to talk with me.So she just hang up the phone.
    2.Has she phoned you? Or Has she called you up.?Or Did she ring you?
    3.Why donít you tell him directly ?
    or
    Why donít you directly tell him?
    4.It is only four months since I came to dubai.
    5.Is it correct to ask ĎIs ur parents (staying) with you?
    6.Why are you both chatting in contradiction to what I said?

    Thank you in advance


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    #2

    Re: correction of sentences requested

    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    hiiii


    Thank you in advance




    1.I phoned her but she did not want to talk to me.So she just hung up the phone.
    2.Has she phoned you?
    3.Why donít you tell him directly ?

    4.It is only four months since I came to dubai.

    5.Are your parents (staying) with you?
    6.Why are you both chatting in contradiction to what I said? I'm not really sure what you are trying to say here.

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    Re: correction of sentences requested

    .Why are you both chatting in contradiction to what I said? I'm not really sure what you are trying to say here.


    What Muktha means is:Why do both of you always contradict to what I say./suggest.
    Regards,
    rj1948.
    Last edited by rj1948; 12-Jun-2008 at 07:49. Reason: correction


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    Re: correction of sentences requested

    4.It is only four months since I came to Dubai.

    5.Are your parents staying with you?

    'ur' is messaging/email shorthand but has no place in correct English.

    6.Why are you both chatting in contradiction to what I said?
    'contradiction' is not appropriate here; and the sentence needs a little rephrasing:

    "Why are you both chatting when I specifically asked for quiet/silence?"
    "Why are you both chattering away and totally disregarding my request for quiet/silence?"
    (this avoids a 'for'...'for' situation as in:
    "Why are you both chattering away with total disregard for my request for quiet/silence?"

    quiet: 'little or no noise' versus silence: 'complete absence of sound' - the choice depends on the degree of 'noiselessness' called for.
    Last edited by David L.; 12-Jun-2008 at 07:56.

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    #5

    Re: correction of sentences requested

    Thanks

    Is it wrong to say 'Has she called you up?'or 'She called me up'
    'Did she ring you'?
    or is it just that 'Has she phoned you?' is the best.

    Thank you in advance

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    #6

    Re: correction of sentences requested

    Thanks

    Is it wrong to say 'Has she called you up?'or 'She called me up'
    'Did she ring you'?
    or is it just that 'Has she phoned you?' is the best.

    Thank you in advance
    Did she phoneyou/me?
    Has she phoned you/me?

    Both are fine.

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    #7

    Re: correction of sentences requested

    Thanks

    Can I say 'She called up me'.?
    I was busy when she called up.

    Thank you in advance

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    #8

    Re: correction of sentences requested

    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    Thanks

    Can I say 'She called up me'.?
    I was busy when she called up.

    Thank you in advance
    Have I got any call from her?-correct.You call me when you are home.-correct.


    Called me up:Summon for duty.It is ambiguous..
    You had better avoid'called me up'.I was busy when she called me over phone. Fine.

    I was busy when she phoned me.Fine.

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    Last edited by rj1948; 12-Jun-2008 at 16:08. Reason: correction


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    Re: correction of sentences requested

    Let's go over some of these phrases and the situations when they might be used:

    Is it wrong to say 'Has she called you up?'or 'She called me up'
    A native speaker, hearing this, would know you were NOT a native speaker. A native speaker uses 'call' in the context of 'call a plumber' (on the phone, to get him to come over and fix something); ' to call a cab' 'call for an ambulance'
    I guess the implication here is that one is calling for some kind of assistance - to fix a leak, to drive one to an appointment, or take one to hospital.
    Similarly, in ads on TV, you will hear the voice over saying, "So why not give us a call and see if we can't quote you cheaper on your next car insurance.'
    So - 'call' in relation to ringing companies, businesses where assistance or actual 'business' is discussed
    Compare:
    we 'ring for a take-away pizza' because we are not summoning help or assistance, and its not some great business transaction - it's just fast food.

    'why not give her a call?' - referring to telephoning friends, relatives - seems to used less these days than 'why not give her a ring', 'why don't you phone her?'. "I phoned the company to complain about..." 'I rang the company to complain about' -

    So, yes, you could say:
    'Did she ring you'?/ "Has she rung you yet?'
    and 'Has she phoned you?'
    Last edited by David L.; 13-Jun-2008 at 02:26.

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