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    #1

    please correct this text.

    "hi,
    I have exchanged gyms last week.
    Now I am working out at Bloor.
    It's more expensive but it's also more convenient for me.
    I can even attend it on Sundays, what I never did at Steels because it's too far.
    The bad news is that the machinery at Bloor is not so good as the one at Steels."


    Please, is this text ok?
    Thanks.

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    Re: please correct this text.

    I changed to going to a different gym last week.
    Now I work out at Bloor.
    It is more expensive but it is more convenient for me.
    I can even go there on Sundays, which I never got to at Steels because it's too far.
    The bad news is that the equipment at Bloor is not as good as that in Steels.

    (not a teacher)

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    #3

    Re: please correct this text.

    I changed gyms last week.
    Now I work out at Bloor.
    It's more expensive but it's more convenient for me.
    I can even go there on Sundays, which I could never do at Steels.
    The downside is that the equipment at Bloor is not as good as that in Steels.

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    Re: please correct this text.

    I am not a teacher, but I'd like to add my two cents.

    Being the correction by Bhaisahab as good as can be, I think it still sounds awkward.
    I mean, five sentences, five full stops... Try something like this:

    "I changed gyms last week and now I work out at Bloor. It is more expensive but I find it more convenient for me; I can even go there on Sundays, which I could never do at Steels because it was too far.
    The downside is that the equipment at Bloor is not as good as that in Steels."

    Credit to my fellows for the corrections.

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    Re: please correct this text.

    hi there,

    please, is "exchanged gyms" grammatically incorrect or not used? I have found "exchanged jobs" on CAE.
    as to "attend the gym", does it sound weird or incorrect? should I only say "go to the gym"? isn't "attend" to go to a certain place very often?
    thanks.
    Last edited by jctgf; 22-Jun-2008 at 17:46.

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    Re: please correct this text.

    Quote Originally Posted by Kraken View Post
    I am not a teacher, but I'd like to add my two cents.

    Being the correction by Bhaisahab as good as can be, I think it still sounds awkward.
    I mean, five sentences, five full stops... Try something like this:

    "I changed gyms last week and now I work out at Bloor. It is more expensive but I find it more convenient for me; I can even go there on Sundays, which I could never do at Steels because it was too far.
    The downside is that the equipment at Bloor is not as good as that in Steels."

    Credit to my fellows for the corrections.
    Actually, I wondered about that myself Kraken, I finally decided (perhaps wrongly) to leave it as the poster had put it, for some reason, I thought, perhaps he wanted it that way.

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    Never mind, mate. We are a team, and it's a good thing that we can add our own points of view.

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    #8

    Re: please correct this text.

    please, is "exchanged gyms" grammatically incorrect or not used? I have found "exchanged jobs" on CAE.
    as to "attend the gym", does it sound weird or incorrect? should I only say "go to the gym"? isn't "attend" to go to a certain place very often?
    thanks.

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    Re: please correct this text.

    Quote Originally Posted by jctgf View Post
    please, is "exchanged gyms" grammatically incorrect or not used? I have found "exchanged jobs" on CAE.
    as to "attend the gym", does it sound weird or incorrect? should I only say "go to the gym"? isn't "attend" to go to a certain place very often?
    thanks.
    "Exchanged Gyms" is not, of itself, incorrect,it's just that people wouldn't say that, except perhaps in a hypothetical situation where two owners of gyms decided to do an exchange of property.

    You could say "I attend a gym." but it would not often be said compared with "I go to a gym."

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