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    Real Estate peragraph - III please correct

    Puranik Villa is located on old Mumbai-Nashik Road, just 8 kms from Thane railway station. A project away from the hustle bustle of the city and close to its natural serenity well connected to all parts of the Mumbai. Everything is in its vicinity like market, restaurants, schools, hospitals etc. At Puranik Villa you get all world-class facilities Intercom and CCTV for each individual row house, wide internal road, landscape gardens, private and visitors parking. When it comes to the interiors, this is your personal sanctuary for recreation and relaxation amidst the flux of city life. Wade in an encompassing ambience of meticulously-crafted modern design and unparalleled panoramic vistas.

    Kindly help me to correct the flow of the language

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    Re: Real Estate peragraph - III please correct

    Puranik Villa(s?) is located on old Mumbai-Nashik Road, just 8 kms from Thane railway station. It is away from the hustle and bustle of the city and close to its natural serenity (? close to natural greenery?) It is strategically located and well connected to all parts of the(omit) Mumbai. Everything is in its(the) vicinity like the market, restaurants, schools, hospitals etc.

    At Puranik Villa you get all the world-class facilities – Intercom and CCTV for each individual row house, wide internal road(s), landscape gardens and private and visitors parking. When it comes to the interior, this is your personal sanctuary for recreation and relaxation amidst the flux of city life(in the midst of hectic city life?). Wade in(i Experience) an encompassing ambience of meticulously-crafted modern design and unparalleled panoramic vistas.

    not a teacher
    Last edited by tedtmc; 29-Jun-2008 at 14:59.

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