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    please correct my text

    After checking both factories, please find the updated cargoes status below for your arrangement Monday:-
    1. GY456 – only 95% finished goods and around 20% packing not be ready
    2. HY467 – 100% finished goods ready, but without packing

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    Quote Originally Posted by Zoe2008 View Post
    After checking both factories, We are pleased to send the updated cargoes status below for your information and making necessary arrangement Monday:-
    1. GY456 – only 95% finished goods and around 20%
    2. HY467 – 100% finished goods ready, but without packing

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    Re: please correct my text

    Quote Originally Posted by Zoe2008 View Post
    After checking both factories, please find the updated cargoes status below for your arrangement Monday:-
    1. GY456 – only 95% finished goods and around 20% packing not be ready
    2. HY467 – 100% finished goods ready, but without packing

    Hi Zoe

    Can I add a little to what Malik has put in that I notice there is nothing in 1. about 20% packed (or unpacked it is not 100% clear in your text)
    2. .... ready but not packed or say unpacked.

    I may be wrong but it is unusual to use cargo in the plural, it is not incorrect the plural is cargoes, but I would have said.

    I have checked the factories and the the updated cargo position, for Monday, is as follows.


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    Re: please correct my text

    What about?
    The factories have provided the following updated cargo status for Monday:
    1. GY456 – 95% finished, with around 80% of the packing ready.
    2. HY467 – 100% finished, but without packing.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Stilo View Post
    I may be wrong but it is unusual to use cargo in the plural, it is not incorrect the plural is cargoes, but I would have said.
    Plural is both cargos and cargoes.
    And yes, it's odd if used in plural. Moreover, there's no need.

    USAGE NOTE:
    Air cargo is commonly known as freight, although non-air related cargo can be called freight.

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    Re: please correct my text

    Hi Stilo,

    Because I added some short sentence before Manas's correction, so that he may not aware.

    You are correct and better to use 'not packed' or 'unpacked'

    Thank you very much for your kindness and correct my sentence again

    Have a nice weekend.

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