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    Hello! Could someone please correct the text as below? Thank you!

    Kunming, a city located in the south of China, yesterday had two bus explosions, which claimed two people lives and left 14 injured, when there’s just two and a half weeks before the opening of Beijing Olympic Games.

    Local police said the two explosions which happened one after another in an hour were obviously deliberate, but they didn’t mention any suspects as well as the motive.
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    Re: Bus Explosions (for corrections)

    In Kunming, a city located in the south of China, two bus explosions occurred yesterday (,)which claimed two (people) lives and left 14 injured, with just two-and-a-half weeks to go before the opening of Beijing Olympic Games.

    Local police said the two explosions which happened one after another (in) within an hour were obviously (deliberate) planned, but they made no mention of any suspects or the motive of the attacks.

    Can you say 'Kunming had two bus explosions'?


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    Hello again, Tedtmc! You are always very helpful. Thank you!

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    they made no mention of any suspects or the motive of the attacks.
    I am wondering why 'didn't mention' is replaced with 'made no mention' by you.

    If you can explain, please tell me. I understand the expressions depend on each individual's sense of the language.

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    Re: Bus Explosions (for corrections)

    but they did not mention any suspects or the motive of the attacks.

    but they made no mention of any suspects or the motive of the attacks.

    but no mention was made of any suspects or the motive of the attacks.
    Hi daffodils
    There is nothing wrong with your original sentence.
    Both sentences mean the same thing actually but I prefer the 'no mention'.

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    Hello Tedtmc,

    Thank you for your answer. I see.

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