Commentary.
That is good.“I am writing to express my concern about the state of the flats in the blocks at Towerhill, on Merseyside.
I suggest replacing wetness and decay with dampness and mould.Eighty families are compelled to endure the wetness and decay in their flats.
That is good.The members of some families - adults and children – sleep in one bedroom because the mould has made the others unusable.
Please be more specific about the conditions outside their flats. (You need to replace "destructions and mess" with something, but at this point I am not sure what it should be.)The people suffer from destructions and mess outside their flats.
The water from the flooded flats trickles down to the flats below them, and because it might come in contact with the electrical wiring that creates a fire hazard.The water from the flooded flats above trickles down the electrical wiring that could be the cause for an accident.
The blocks of flats are not boarded up and the police don't patrol the area. That leaves the tenants vulnerable to crime.The blocks of flats are not boarded up and the police doesn’t patrol the area. Therefore the danger of crimes faces the tenants.
That is good.I must urge you to take immediate action to evacuate the flats.”
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