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    Post writing errors

    Correct the errors please. THANKS IN ADVANCE.

    Dear K

    There is a sudden change to my job which cut down my total working hours. In that situation I would like make a change to my current investment plan. As you know every two weeks I transfer $200.00 dollars from my cheque account to my non-registered investment account. I would like to cancele that trasaction for now. I need to make the change immediatlely. Thanks for your attention regarding that situation. If you have anyother question please let me know. I available after 6:00 pm from Monday to Friaday.

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    Quote Originally Posted by jkl View Post
    Correct the errors please. THANKS IN ADVANCE.

    Dear K

    There is a sudden change to my job which cuts down my total working hours. In this situation,I would like make a change in (to) my current investment plan. As you know every two weeks I transfer $200.00 dollars from my cheque account to my non-registered investment account. I would like to cancel that trasaction forthwith (now. I need to make the change immediatlely.) Thanks for your attention to (regarding) the new situation. If you have anyother question please let me know. I am available after 6:00 pm from Monday to Friaday.

    Sincerely
    J.
    Delete word/sentence in the brackets.

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    re: writing errors

    In this situation,I would like make a change in (to) my current investment plan.
    I think it is 'change to a plan'.
    How do you relate reduced working hours to a change to/cancellation of an investment plan? Do you mean your income has been drastically reduced and thus you cannot afford to continue with the plan?

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    Re: writing errors

    Say:
    My hours at work have been reduced, and my weekly pay will be less.

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    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    I think it is 'change to a plan'.
    How do you relate reduced working hours to a change to/cancellation of an investment plan? Do you mean your income has been drastically reduced and thus you cannot afford to continue with the plan?

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    Change to a new plan. Here the change is in the current/existing plan.

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    Re: writing errors

    Change to a new plan. Here the change is in the current/existing plan.
    Manas
    It is immaterial whether it is a new plan or an existing plan.
    You say:
    There is a change in/of plan.
    You make changes/amendments to a plan

    I'll let one of the teachers to confirm.

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    Re: writing errors

    Dear K
    There has been a sudden cut in my hours and because of that I will need to change my current investment plan. Every two weeks I transfer $200.00 from my chequing account to my non-registered investment account, and I would like to cancel that transaction for now, and would like to make the change immediatlely.

    If you have any questions please let me know. I am available after 6:00 pm, Monday to Friday.
    Sincerely,

    J.

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    Re: writing errors

    Quote Originally Posted by Soup View Post
    Dear K
    There has been a sudden cut in my hours and because of that I will need to change my current investment plan. Every two weeks I transfer $200.00 from my chequing account to my non-registered investment account, and I would like to cancel that transaction for now, and would like to make the change immediatlely.

    If you have any questions please let me know. I am available after 6:00 pm, Monday to Friday.
    Sincerely,

    J.
    That is good, but I would delete "sudden" and "current' (in the first sentence) because neither of them makes sense to me in that context. (Why the "current investment plan"? Why not the "future investment plan" (because investments are for the future)? That would make just as much sense.) I would say there has been a reduction in my hours, and I need to change my investment plan (because of the anticipated reduction in income.

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