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    #1

    1st post of a chinese boy, seek 4 help, thx sincerely

    Text:
    Love Is Like A Ghost,whose Existence Many People Believe In While Few Ever Come Across One.

    Questions:

    1. Are There Any Grammatic Mistakes?

    2. Is There Any Logical Problem?

    3. Is "while" Good Here? (some Better Words/ Phrases Suggested?)

    4.is "come Across" Good Here? (some Better Words/ Phrases Suggested?)

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    Thx So Much 4 Reading!
    Thx Much More For Giving Answers!


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    #2

    Re: 1st post of a chinese boy, seek 4 help, thx sincerely

    Welcome to the forums.

    Quote Originally Posted by okman chan View Post
    Text:

    Love Is Like A Ghost,whose Existence Many People Believe In While Few Ever Come Across One.

    Love is like a ghost, whose existence many people believe in while few have ever come across one.

    Love is like a ghost, whose existence many people believe in although few have ever come across it.


    Questions:

    1. Are there any grammatical mistakes? Yes - you only need a capital letter on the first word in the sentence [or with proper names].

    2. Is There Any Logical Problem? You have a logical mistake in the the first part refers to "A ghost, who" so the second part should end "few have ever come across it".

    3. Is "while" Good Here? (some Better Words/ Phrases Suggested?) see my suggested altered sentence.

    4.is "come Across" Good Here? (some Better Words/ Phrases Suggested?) It is fine.

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    Thanks So Much for Reading!
    Thanks Much More For Giving Answers!
    Please use proper English - it helps us to establish your true level. Chatlish or texting is not acceptable.


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    #3

    Re: 1st post of a chinese boy, seek 4 help, thx sincerely

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    Welcome to the forums.



    Please use proper English - it helps us to establish your true level. Chatlish or texting is not acceptable.
    My dear friend, thank you so much!

    Acutally I've been thinking about using "it" instead of "one",
    as well as "although" instead of "while".

    Just now I googled it, and found something might be the original edition --
    "True love is like a ghost; everyong talks of it, but few have met it face to face."

    Which one do you think is better?
    I mean which one sounds more natural and more like native English.

    Thanks again!


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    #4

    Re: 1st post of a chinese boy, seek 4 help, thx sincerely

    Your sentence is fine, the one you found is more skilled in its use of idiom. That is something that can only come through practice.

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