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    Kindly correct the paragraph - Marketing literature II

    You tell your friend that I am planning to buy a Nokia mobile, I heard itís rough and tough and a durable product, so its best for me. This is the power of Word-of-Mouth communication. Now if friend says, why donít you try the latest handset launch by Samsung? Its video quality is excellent. Even though till now you has made up your mind that I will grab the Nokia mobile, now it is in ambiguity. And thatís the power of opinion leader, who can change your mind in millisecond or at least stop you to go ahead with your own decision


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    Re: Kindly correct the paragraph - Marketing literature II

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    You tell your friend that I am [ you are ] planning to buy a Nokia mobile as you have heard itís rough and tough and a durable product, so it's best for me your purpose. This is the power of Word-of-Mouth communication. Now what if the/your/my friend asks, "Why donít you try the latest handset launch by Samsung? Its video quality is excellent." Even though till now you has made up your mind that I will grab the Nokia mobile, now it is in ambiguity. A dilemma has been introduced: you/I had decided on the Nokia, but maybe that's not the right decision.And thatís the power of an opinion leader, one/someone who can change your mind in millisecond or at least stop you going ahead with your own decision

    You start with "You" and then change to first person. Keep it to one or other.

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    Re: Kindly correct the paragraph - Marketing literature II

    Thanks a lot for your kind help, i still commit so many mistakes

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