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Hi,Can you please correct my poem and see if it makes sens, thank you.
Hi this another poem I had to write about my dear mother
I see how you work hard everyday as an active busy bee in a flower.
I see you never complain about it yet you seem to enjoy it
I see you don’t need anyone’s reward, you know our king has all the reward for you
I see how you don’t need anyone’s help; by this I’ve learnt independence
I see how you understand your duty as a MOTHER
I see when ever I do wouldn’t express what I want to say
I wish I could hear your pains
I wish I could carry your pains
I wish I can make you happy
I don’t know how to say I love
I don’t know how to express it
Only my lord knows how much I love
Only my lord knows how much I appreciate the cleanness of the house
You protected me against all the evil
Even if it means risking your life.
I want you to be with me forever
I want to see your kind smiley face every morning
I want to sleep in your lap again but only if I could
I know writing wont express most of my love
But I know if I ask my lord sincerely to wish you what I wish for myself.
Will anyone help me edit my poem orr not??!!!1