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    johnny-yang Guest

    My cover letter & resume

    Cover letter
    Return Date: October 17th 2004
    Shanghai Volkswagen Automotive Co.Ltd
    RE: Possible Employment
    Dear Manager of HR:
    > In a manner of speaking, I would graduate from Shanghai University College and set foot in social works. Dring the preiod of schooling, I gradually developed my opinion that it is significat to insist in self view and exploit potential self ability. Besides the school life, I also spend my leisure time in joining in social practice. I still make contact with the company which I make practial training at every holiday. Many of them are dealing with exporting industry. I understand the distinction between the theory and practice through practising.And I learned that permantly remember do homework before making any business. That means comprehensive market research.
    > In my view, I hope to become a member of Shanghai Volkswagen Automotive Co.Ltd.And I expect to be given a opportunity to serve as the occupation related to the markeing filed. Shanghai Volkswagen Automotive Co.Ltd attract me because of three reasons. Firstly, I'm enthusiastic about automobile naturaly. I always observe the automobile markets abroad and domestic and collect the information referred to cars. Secondary, it is said that Shanghai Volkswagen Automotive Co.Ltd enforce training the member of the ability, I think I could learned much experience and skill from my work. I want become a man who not only simply enjoy automobile but also deeply understand automobile.Shanghai Volkswagen Automotive Co.Ltd
    > is a ideal platform. The last but not least is the company's purpose. It is 中国路, 大众心. When the advertisment appeared in TV, it make me absolutely faith that Shanghai Volkswagen Automotive Co.Ltd is the most suitable for me. I warmly anticipate to make controbution our Chinese vechile industry.And find out the car culture which really fit Chinese. Finally, I real hope I qualified with the staff in Shanghai Volkswagen Automotive Co.Ltd.
    > Sincerely,

    Personal information

    English name: Johnny Chinese name: Yang Bin
    Sex: Male Date of birth: March 14st , 1984
    Place of birth: Shanghai Telephone: (021) 62156751
    Email address: Marital Status: Unmarried

    2002.92005.6 International Business, SILC, Shanghai University
    Academic Main Courses
    College English, Business English, International Finance, International Management, Organizational Behavior, Accounting, Business Communication, Business Writing Report, Microeconomic, Macroeconomic, Global Marketing, International Business law, International Trade, Data Base, etc
    Work experience
    2004.6-2004.8 Worked in Shanghai Dongxin Garments Co.,LTD.
    Mainly in charge of processing the users
    Computer Abilities:
    Skilled in use of Win 2000/XP, Office2003, Frontpage, Photoshop, Auto CAD, Basic programme
    English Skills
    Have a good command of both spoken and written
    Enjoy facing challenges and risk. Aggressive, independent and be able to work under a dynamic environment. Have coordination skills, teamwork spirit. Social ability is my strength.

  2. #2
    Tdol is offline Editor,
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • UK
      • Current Location:
      • Japan
    Join Date
    Nov 2002

    This needs a lot of reworking in detail:

    In a manner of speaking, I would graduate from Shanghai University College and set foot in social works.

    Firstly, 'in a mannerof speaaking' doesn't fit here. If yougraduate 'in a manner of speaking', I would interpret that as an unsuccessful graduation. Secondly, shouldn't it be 'will' not 'would'? I wouldn't use'set foot'; this means enter something and not stay long, rather than embarkon a career in social work (no's')

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