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    Kindly help me to merger three sentences into one

    Buy watch and take back 30% worth in diamond Buy gold and take back 15% worth in diamondBuy diamond and take back 30% worth in watchCan we make a short and simple sentence by combining all the three about sentences without changing the essence of the communication. Thanks in advance

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    Re: Kindly help me to merger three sentences into one

    One sentence is difficult when you have so many options. Consider offering a 30% OFF sale - and give the details in additional information.


    Buy a watch, diamond jewelry or gold item today - and get 30% off on your next purchase! *

    * See details.


    Get 30% off on your next purchase when you buy a watch, diamond or gold jewlery.

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    Re: Kindly help me to merger three sentences into one

    Buy a watch, diamond jewelry or gold item today - and get up to 30% off on your next purchase! *

    * See details.


    Get up to 30% off on your next purchase when you buy a watch, diamond or gold jewlery.

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    Re: Kindly help me to merger three sentences into one

    Quote Originally Posted by susiedqq View Post
    Buy a watch, diamond jewelry or gold item today - and get up to 30% off on your next purchase! *

    * See details.


    Get up to 30% off on your next purchase when you buy a watch, diamond or gold jewlery.

    Thanks for your suggestions and how about the following

    Buy watch or Gold take back 30% & 15% worth in diamond respectively or buy diamond and take 30% worth back in watch

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    Re: Kindly help me to merger three sentences into one

    Buy a watch or Gold jewelry and take back (what does "take back" mean) 30% & 15% worth in diamond respectively or buy diamond (what? jewlery?)and take 30% worth back in watch

    Customers get a discount.
    Customers are given a discount.



    How about . . .

    Buy a watch or gold jeweltry and get 15% off on any diamond purchase, or buy diamond jewelry and get 30% off on your purchase of a watch.

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