Jessica's cover letter and resume

[Jessica-young]

Dear Sir or Madam:
I am writing to you about the possibility of working as a assistant be on probation for KFC. It is the reputation and growth of your company attracts my great interests.

I am a ungraduate student in Shanghai University. During the study, I have a part-time job in KFC as a waitress. I haved worked for KFC for about one year and now I hope to find a satisfactory job. Recently, I get a message that your company will recruit assistant be on probation. I believe my power and experience will help me to be successful as a assistant be on probation for KFC.

Please call me your convenience to set up an interview time . My telephone number is 13917512*** and my email address is:[email protected] Thank you!



Your faithfully,
Jessica



Enclosed are my resume.

Name: Jiaye Yang
English Name: Jessica
Sex: Female
Date of birth: Jan.22, 1984, in Shanghai
Campus Address: ShangHai University 7-104
Zio Code: 201800
Email address: [email protected]
Telephone number: 13917512***
Health : Excellent
Status: Undergraduate

EDUCATION:
2002-present The Shanghai University
1999-2002 The Chu Neng Senior High School
1996-1999 The Sixty-second Middle School

English Skills
Have a good command of both spoken and written English .Past CET-4

Computer Abilities
Skilled in use of MS FrontPage, Win 98, JavaScript, HTML, Office 2000,

WORK EXPERIENCE:
December 2003 – present, I am a waitress for KFC. My work is to serve for customs.
July 2004 – August 2004 I had a social practice as a accountant in a company.
September 2004－present, I have a job in the school. That is a reception in the computer room. I am in charge of managing the student.

INTRESTEDFIELD
I want to be a assistant be on probation for KFC. Because this can train the social intercourse skill and know how to communicate with customer. Get this job, I will also know the work experience of international chains. I have a one-year experience for serving customers and I know what the customer need. So I hope I have an opportunity to do such work.

I shall be much obliged if your company will accord me an opportunity for an interview.
Thank you!

[Tdol]

t is the reputation and growth of your company attracts my great interests.

This sentence is not grammatically correct- you should say
t is the reputation and growth of your company WHICH attracts my great interest.

However, even than, I'm not sure that the sentence works- it sounds a bit to much like flattery.