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    Smile please edit this paragraph

    "what's your favorite food?"


    my favorite food is soup.and the ingradient of that is rice,barley,vedgetable,some hen,and tomato sauce.it is very tasty .moreover ,soup has alot of vitamin and protein to make my body health and i sarve it during winter days to protect me against catching a cold.that was all my favorite food as i described it to you .

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    Re: please edit this paragraph

    Not a teacher, but here's my best shot:

    Soup is my favorite food. My favorite kind of soup is made with rice, barley, vegetables, chicken, and tomato sauce. It is very tasty, and it has a lot of vitamins and protein to help make my body healthy. I savor it on cold winter days because it protects me from catching a cold.

    You should probably wait for one of the Brits to come by and check it. They are better than I am at this kind of stuff , but I thought I'd try to help out. I think the last sentence was unnecessary, so I left it out.

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    Re: please edit this paragraph

    I would appreciate this opportunity to request that you as a teacher edit my writings i will send because you reply me prompt.many thanks for your kindness.
    best wishes

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