Hi - I need to send a formal email to couple professors to invite them to be in my dissertation committee and I wrote the following email but I am not sure if it is good to send. The first 2 sentences sounds wrong to me but I did not know how to fix them. Could you please help me? Thanks!
Dear Prof. A and Prof. B,
I am writing to invite you to serve on my dissertation committee. I would be very grateful to have you in my committee and enrich my work with your insights.
Hoping you are agree to serve on my committee, I will want to set a proposal defense date for the last week of November, if possible. Please let me know your availability in the week of November 24-28 and I will try to schedule a time to present and defend my dissertation research proposal.
Thank you for your time.
Sincerely,
Dear Prof. A and Prof. B,
I am writing to invite you to serve on my dissertation committee. I would be very grateful to have you in my committee and enrich my work with your insights.
Hoping you are agree to serve on my committee, I will want to set a proposal defense date for the last week of November, if possible. Please let me know your availability in the week of November 24-28 and I will try to schedule a time to present and defend my dissertation research proposal.
Thank you for your time.
Sincerely,