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    Skin care ad kindly check the copy

    Whom you can trust for your skin care?
    Expert who else…

    Dr. Punima Mhatre’s expertise of over 10 years in skin care assures you of a special skin care treatment, which you always wished for. A customized facial treatment based on your current skin condition and individual preference, after an initial consultation; a skincare program based on your lifestyle and realistic expectations; visit the clinic today and queue your skin thirst to be the most gorgeous

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    Re: Skin care ad kindly check the copy

    A few suggestions to consider:

    Whom can you trust for your skin care?
    An Expert, of course!

    Dr. Punima Mhatre’s expertise of over 10 years in skin care assures you of the special skin care treatment you have always wished for: [note colon here, not period] A customized facial treatment based on your current skin condition and individual preference, after an initial consultation; and a skincare program based on your lifestyle and realistic expectations. [note full stop here] Visit the clinic today and [at this point I lost your meaning entirely] queue your skin thirst to be the most gorgeous

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    Re: Skin care ad kindly check the copy

    Quote Originally Posted by jlinger View Post
    A few suggestions to consider:

    Whom can you trust for your skin care?
    An Expert, of course!

    Dr. Punima Mhatre’s expertise of over 10 years in skin care assures you of the special skin care treatment you have always wished for: [note colon here, not period] A customized facial treatment based on your current skin condition and individual preference, after an initial consultation; and a skincare program based on your lifestyle and realistic expectations. [note full stop here] Visit the clinic today and [at this point I lost your meaning entirely] queue your skin thirst to be the most gorgeous
    Can there be better way to end the para....I used ....queue your skin thirst to be the most gorgeous...just to emphasise to be the gorgeous and to say that your skin needs a special treatment immediately. isn't that is working

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