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    • Join Date: Sep 2006
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    #1

    Just one sentence

    Hi there,

    Can someone help me to make this sentence sound better?

    Thanks!

    "This region is located in the North East of Spain and has the country’s second largest city, Barcelona, which rivals and is often ahead of the Spanish capital in many respects"


    • Join Date: Aug 2008
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    #2

    Re: Just one sentence

    Too much information in one sentence. I'd go for:

    This region is located in the North East of Spain and has the country’s second largest city, Barcelona. Barcelona rivals and in many respects is often ahead of the Spanish capital (Madrid).

    or
    Barcelona, the second largest city of Spain, is located in the North East region of the country. Barcelona rivals and in many respects is ahead of the Spanish capital - Madrid. (However, in this sentence the attention is shifted to Barcelona rather than the region).

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