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    English Biographical Essay

    Can you please help me rephrase my concluding sentence to be shorter and less awkward?

    Sometimes some of her kids felt guilty for taking advantage of her, since she was so generous, but to her she did not feel that way, since she was so used to being generous, it shows how generous she really was.


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    Re: English Biographical Essay

    {Not a teacher}
    I would suggest:
    Sometimes, some of her kids felt guilty for taking advantage of her generosity, but, because it was in her nature, she did not see how generous she really was.

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