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    zimbabwe's gdp

    Hi there,
    'Nowadays, the country is going through a severe economic crisis, Zimbabwe's GDP contracted by 55 per cent compared to what it was in the 1980s and 1990s'
    Is it written the correct way?
    Should I change any words to improve that?

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    Re: zimbabwe's gdp

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    Hi Carla, I would use "shrank" (or "has shrunk") rather than "contracted". "Contracted" has various other meanings, but I'm sure it would still be understood in the context of your sentence.
    Peter

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    Re: zimbabwe's gdp

    Quote Originally Posted by carla guaraldi View Post
    Hi there,
    'Nowadays, the country is going through a severe economic crisis, Zimbabwe's GDP contracted by 55 per cent compared to what it was in the 1980s and 1990s'
    Is it written the correct way?
    Should I change any words to improve that?

    Thank you
    You are also joining two sentences with a comma before Zimbabwe. You can't do that in English.
    I would use "has contracted" or "has shrunk".

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    Re: zimbabwe's gdp

    Should I leave the comma out? Why cant I use the comma the way I did?

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    #5

    Re: zimbabwe's gdp

    Quote Originally Posted by carla guaraldi View Post
    Should I leave the comma out? Why can't I use the comma the way I did?
    You used a comma to join two independent clauses. (That's called a comma fault.) Instead, use a period (full stop) or semicolon.




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    Re: zimbabwe's gdp

    Quote Originally Posted by carla guaraldi View Post
    Should I leave the comma out? Why cant I use the comma the way I did?
    Simplifying your sentence may help to illustrate:
    The country is going through a crisis, Zimbabwe's GDP contracted by 55 per cent.
    Leaving the comma out doesn't help. You could fix it with any number of conjunctions, adverbs or rewriting, but in English, you can't write:
    This is my brother, he is an engineer. Thats two sentences, It's called a comma splice.
    You can write:
    To illustrate that the country is going through a crisis, Zimbabwe's GDP contracted by 55 per cent.
    The country is going through a crisis, with Zimbabwe's GDP contracting by 55 per cent.
    etc.

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    #7

    Re: zimbabwe's gdp

    My suggestion:
    Zimbabwe's GDP has shrunk to 55 percent of what it used to be during eighties and this has led to an Economic crisis.

    P.S. : I am not a teacher of English. Just someone who loves the language.

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    Re: zimbabwe's gdp

    Quote Originally Posted by carla guaraldi View Post
    'Nowadays, the country is going through a severe economic crisis, Zimbabwe's GDP contracted by 55 per cent compared to what it was in the 1980s and 1990s'
    Leave out Nowadays. Perhaps:
    The country is going through a severe economic crisis. Zimbabwe's GDP has contracted by 55% in the last year.

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    The country is going through a severe economic crisis. Zimbabwe's GDP is 55% less than what it was in 1990.
    What do you think?


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