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    paraphrasing of words and word combinations 2

    Dear teachers,

    Would you be kind enough to revise my paraphrasing of the bolded words and word combinations from the following sentences?

    1.1. It was suggested that the governments immediately adhere to terms of peace.
    1.2. It was suggested that the governments immediately bind themselves by treaties to terms of peace.

    2.1. The history of the working movement in America shows that there is a wide gap between the handful of the rich and the millions of working people who often resort to strikes because they live in poverty.
    2.2. The history of the working movement in America shows that there is a abyss between the handful of the rich and the millions of working people who often resort to strikes because they live on the verge of pauperism.

    3.1. Lenin pointed out that in the final analysis the Brest-Litovsk peace terms proved tht Bolsheviks were right and that they did not build hopes on sand.
    3.2. Lenin pointed out that after all the Brest-Litovsk peace terms proved that Bolsheviks were right and that they did not build castles in the air.

    Thank you for your efforts.

    Regards,

    V.

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    Re: paraphrasing of words and word combinations 2

    Not a teacher.

    bind themselves by treaties
    I don't really think this is such a good replacement for "adhere." The term "adhere" only really refers to the quality of staying with or staying true to something. If you were to leave it with only "bind themselves" then it would be truer to the original definition.

    abyss/on the verge of pauperism
    Good use of very strong descriptive language. It is a little stronger than the original phrases, but if that was your intent then well done.

    after all/build castles in the air
    "After all" doesn't really work in this sense. I might use "in the end" to paraphrase this word. Your second phrase works well in this sense. If you wanted, you could say, "Lenin pointed out that the Brest-Litovsk peace terms proved that Bolsheviks were right and that they did not build castles in the air after all."

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