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    #1

    Post Please correct the following letter

    This is inform you that I have sent you three drafts in the last three months which was to be deposited into my A/C NO.XXXXX, details are as follows.
    1 Draft No. XXXXXXXX in the amount of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx
    2 Draft No. XXXXXXXX in the amount of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx
    3 Draft No. XXXXXXXX in the amount of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx
    Please note that I havenít received any acknowledgement receipt or account statement for the above deposits until now
    I request you to look into this matter and send me the receipt an updated statement thereafter reflecting these deposits.
    Thank you for your prompt attention to this matter


    • Join Date: Apr 2008
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    #2

    Re: Please correct the following letter

    Quote Originally Posted by JRD View Post
    This is inform you that I have sent you three Demand Drafts in last three months and informed to deposit into my A/C NO.XXXXX. The details are as follows.
    1 Draft No. XXXXXXXX of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx
    2 Draft No. XXXXXXXX of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx
    3 Draft No. XXXXXXXX of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx

    Please note that I havenít received any acknowledgement receipt or account statement for the above deposits till now. Please send me the receipt and an updated statement by reflecting these deposits.

    Thank you for your prompt attention
    (not a teacher)


    • Join Date: Nov 2008
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    Re: Please correct the following letter

    I would write it this way.

    This is to inform you that I have sent you three drafts in the last three months to be deposited into A/C NO.XXXXX. The details are as follows:
    1. Draft No. XXXXXXXX in the amount of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx
    2. Draft No. XXXXXXXX in the amount of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx
    3. Draft No. XXXXXXXX in the amount of $.XXXXXX dated xxxxx

    To date, I have not received any acknowledgement in the form of a receipt or account statement showing the above deposits.
    I would appreciate it if you could look into the matter and send me a receipt and account statement reflecting the deposits.
    Thank you for your prompt attention.

    My English may be old school , but you may want to avoid the use of contractions like "haven't" in formal letters, for example when writing to a bank.

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