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    Disruptive Students

    Dear Teacher,

    Grateful if you could help correct the following sentence:

    Naughtly students are arranged to receive systematic training programmes in the Extensive Training Unit for changing their unbecoming behaviours. (Note: the emphasis is on "naughtly students".)

    Thank you for your assistance!

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    re: Disruptive Students

    Quote Originally Posted by Ily View Post
    Dear Teacher,



    Naughtly students are scheduled to receive systematic training [delete programmes] in the Extensive Training Unit to change their unbecoming behaviour [singular].
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    re: Disruptive Students

    Unruly students/students with discipline problems are sent for systematic training progrrammes at the Extensive Training Units for rehabilitation.

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    re: Disruptive Students

    Well, if you want to paraphrase, then, how about "Bad kids will be whipped."

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    re: Disruptive Students

    Naughtly students are arranged to receive systematic training programmes in the Extensive Training Unit for changing their unbecoming behaviours.
    I have taken the liberty to rephrase the sentence because I feel the words used (underlined above) are not apt.
    The 'systematic training programmes' are corrective programmes I presume.

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    re: Disruptive Students

    Disruptive students (take part in, go through, must attend mandatory) systematic training programmes in the Extensive Training Unit to change their unbecoming behaviours.

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    re: Disruptive Students

    I agree with the re-write: The use of "naughty" may end up being unintentionally humorous. We talk about naughty children as mischievious little imps who do minor things. This doesn't seem to be talking about 8-year-old boys who pull little girl' pigtails.

    Meanwhile, "unbecoming behaviors" sounds like failing to say "excuse me" after a belch or wiping their mouths with their sleeves, or possibly using foul language. This also does not seem to be the type of behavior that is being described.

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    #8

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    I concur with all your corrections. It was naughty of me to be so flippant.

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