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  1. Helena Ade
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    Lightbulb Help me check the passage please!Thanks!

    In our colorful lifes,there are lots of different things happen every day.Some of them are ineresting,and there are also something move me.
    One month ago,I was taking a bus back to my home as usual.The bus was really crowded.It was already 5:30.But I was still on the bus.The evening had fellen.Theweather became cold and rainy.I was very worried because it was too late,my mother must be waiting me at home for dinner.But I couldn’e do anything except hoping the bus can run quickly as it could.

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    Re: Help me check the passage please!Thanks!

    Quote Originally Posted by Helena Ade View Post
    In our colorful lives, there are lots of different things that happen every day. Some of them are interesting, and there are also some things which move me.
    One month ago, I was taking a bus back home as usual. The bus was really crowded. It was already 5:30pm(?). But I was still on the bus. The evening had fallen. (fall, fell, fallen) The weather became cold and rainy. I was very worried because it was so late, my mother must be waiting for me at home for dinner. But I couldn’t do anything except hope the bus would drive as quickly as it could.
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