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    Please correct this sentence

    Dear Teacher,

    Can we say we aim for "opening up vistas of collaborative and quality services" in areas such as enviromental protection?

    Thank you for your assistance,

    Best,
    Ily

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    Re: Please correct this sentence

    You 'aim at opening up vistas'; but is that all you do? Don't you also help people make their visions real? (In that case, 'opening up vistas' is not much of an aim; if you help them do something real, say so.)

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    Re: Please correct this sentence

    Another option is

    We aim to open up vistas of collaborative and quality services ....

    This works if you are making a list of "goals" of the group.

    to open up . . .
    to protect . . .
    to enhance . . .
    to establish . .

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    Re: Please correct this sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by susiedqq View Post
    Another option is

    We aim to open up vistas of collaborative and quality services ....

    This works if you are making a list of "goals" of the group.

    to open up . . .
    to protect . . .
    to enhance . . .
    to establish . .
    I like it. There's nothing like a bit of white space!

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