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    correct sentences?

    hello,

    could you tell me if these sentences are correct?

    "A 2003 Hackett Group study reported that 30% of Information Systems projects fail (Brown, ‎‎2007). E-learning, being an information system, suffers even higher failure rates (Hogarth & ‎Dawson, 2008).‎"

    thank!

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    Re: correct sentences?

    Grammatically, yes, but I cannot see the logic of 'being an information system'. If 30% of infoormation systems projects fail, then I would expect e-learning to have the same rate rate of failure. Why does 'being an information system' justify the higher rate?


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    I think the full context answers your question(please tell me if not....):

    "A typical e-leaning project is at the intersection of two error-prone domains: Information ‎Systems (IS) and human systems. A 2003 Hackett Group study reported that 30% of ‎Information Systems projects fail (Brown, 2007). E-learning, being an information system, ‎suffers even higher failure rates (Hogarth & Dawson, 2008).‎"

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    Re: correct sentences?

    Quote Originally Posted by falfuly View Post
    I think the full context answers your question(please tell me if not....):

    "A typical e-leaning project is at the intersection of two error-prone domains: Information ‎Systems (IS) and human systems. A 2003 Hackett Group study reported that 30% of ‎Information Systems projects fail (Brown, 2007). E-learning, being an information system, ‎suffers even higher failure rates (Hogarth & Dawson, 2008).‎"
    No, the same problem remains.
    It would make sense if you said:
    "E-learning, being both an information system and a human system, ‎suffers even higher failure rates (Hogarth & Dawson, 2008).‎" OR
    "E-learning, an information system, ‎suffers even higher failure rates (Hogarth & Dawson, 2008).‎ This is possibly/probably because of the added error of the human element."


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    Re: correct sentences?

    great, i'll change it, thank you very much.

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