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Last Sunday, my family and I went to the beach at the East Coast Park. When we stepped onto the sandy beach, a gentle breeze blew onto our faces.
My brother and I were rushing to the public toilets to change into our swimming attire. My parents laughed at seeing us in such a hurry.
After my brother and I had changed, we ran to the sea to have a swim. After swimming for about half an hour, our mother called us for lunch. Our lunch consisted of peanut butter sandwiches.
After lunch, my brother and I went to take a nap. After we had woken up, my parents joined us for a swim. After we swam, we went to take a shower at the public toilets. After the shower, we packed up and went home.
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