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Parents shouldn’t control children’s time
It is obvious that more and more people in the world start to highly value of their children’s pre-education. Most of parents realized a successful education is not finished children’s school works only, but also use their leisure time effectively. In that case, an efficient and reasonable schedule is required. However, a plenty of parents believe that minors are simple and playful, and their horizontal are not broaden enough to see their future clearly. They prefer to partially made plans that follow their own will, rather than let children plan their own times themselves. As far as I can see, this is inacceptable.
Parents, as the guardian of children, have the compelling obligation to take care of them. Planning all their spare time for them seems responsible, but actually deprived their rights of choosing own life, and makes them feel passionless and indifference. As an analogy, if the whole life is a long yarn, and it has already being spun neatly by workers, then it is meaningless to routinely draw the rest out. It is cruel and unfair that subjectively let children live in a life that they didn’t chose.
There is also a serious situation, that children may contradict their parents’ plan because of their dislike. Although, seniority always want to give posterity what they believe is the best, if there is a contradiction that posterity have different opinion, normally, it will be neglected without any concession. Operationalism, as it is commonly referred to, which of a great harm to family relationship and children’s future. It could easily lead them to a passive attitude, and even worse, an extreme resistance. That’s the reason why there is an increasing rate of children’s elopement in recent years.
For children themselves, they also have their ability to plan their times well. One of the most essential reasons for parents who mistrust children’s plans is that they mistrust children’s ability. Frankly, minors can hardly control or set their times efficiently and accurately like adults. However, it is a good way to foster their capability of getting life organized. Sometimes parents can give them advise and opinions, and help them make their plans more reasonable. In that way, not only children can achieve a suitable plan for their life, but also parents will rest assured of them.
To draw a conclusion, parents should clear their role in children’s growth, to act as a guide rather than a mandator. Only by giving enough private space, they can grow up strongly and healthily.
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