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    Jewellery ad headline please check

    Kindly check the below lines and if we can reduce the number of words and make it short and sweet....

    Beauty is measured by unique designs you wear

    You deserve something special & precious.

    You deserve something precious.

    Stunning treasures and gorgeous designs


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    Re: Jewellery ad headline please check

    Beauty [Whose/what beauty?] is reflected in the unique jewellery you choose.

    You deserve something unique

    Gorgeous designs = stunning treasures.

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