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    Hello dear languagelovers,

    I was given the task of proofreading the following text:

    You can find Our Hhotel X is situated in the historical city centre of Pécs, . It was built on the southern part side of the Kálvária hill, in the middle of a nature reserve. In it´s its neighbourhood thete there are lots of museums and monuments.
    All of the hotel's 25 rooms meet all the requirements required standards of a 3-star hotel . All rooms and so are furnished with TV, minibar, telephone, and a bathroom. Four rooms are a bit more special because of their We have four special rooms for those who want a spectacular view of the city. The Hotel has In the premises there is an underground garage for 12 cars, including parking place space for 2 buses, an elevator, a garden, and an open-air swimming pool. In addition, we offer to our guests [/B] 24 hour an around-the-clock reception and check-out services. All the services are at the disposal of our guests. From our menu you can taste from the dainty dishes of Hungarian and International kitchen. You can enjoy the culinary delights of our cuisine, with regional as well as international dishes. Our restaurant caters for 60 persons, 30 in the balcony persons.
    We can organize programs, like sight-seeing,
    Programs that we organize are:

    -visiting the famous Zsolnay-factory, visiting the Champain
    -visiting the Champaigne factory,
    -medical hot-water bathing in Harkány,
    -wine tasting in Villány and excursion
    -trekking
    in the eastern part of the Mecsek (h)Hill.

    Please make your comment on my work. Thanks.
    Last edited by svartnik; 06-Jan-2009 at 11:17.

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    #2

    Re: proofreading

    It looks pretty good to me.


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    #3

    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by bhaisahab View Post
    It looks pretty good to me.
    Thanks. Others are welcome to throw their opinions in the hat too.
    Last edited by svartnik; 05-May-2009 at 11:53.


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    Re: proofreading

    This is my final version:

    Our hotel is situated in the historical city centre of Pécs, on the southern side of the Kálvária Hill, in the middle of a nature reserve. In its neighbourhood, there are lots of museums and monuments.
    All of the hotel's 25 rooms meet all the required standards of a three-star hotel and so are furnished with TV, minibar, telephone, and a bathroom. We have four special rooms for those who want a spectacular view of the city. In the premises there is an underground garage for 12 cars, including parking space for 2 buses, an elevator, a garden, and an open-air swimming pool. You can enjoy the culinary delights of our cuisine, with regional as well as international dishes. Our restaurant caters for 60 persons, 30 in the balcony. We offer to our guests an around-the-clock reception and check-out services.

    Facultative programs that we organize are:

    -visiting the famous Zsolnay-factory,
    -visiting the Champagne factory,
    - medical hot-water bathing in Harkány,
    -wine tasting in Villány
    -trekking in the eastern part of the Mecsek Hill.

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    #5

    Re: proofreading

    Hello.

    1. Our hotel is situated in the historical city centre...
    2. Our hotel is located in the historical city centre...

    Is either way fine?


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    "Our restaurant caters for 60 persons, 30 in the balcony."

    Can I say: "Our restaurant has 60 seats, 30 of which are in the balcony"?


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    Quote Originally Posted by Daruma View Post
    Hello.

    1. Our hotel is situated in the historical city centre...
    2. Our hotel is located in the historical city centre...

    Is either way fine?
    How did you manage to dig up this old thread?
    Thanks for your input. Yes, I think they mean the very same thing.

    Quote Originally Posted by Daruma View Post
    "Our restaurant caters for 60 persons, 30 in the balcony."

    Can I say: "Our restaurant has 60 seats, 30 of which are in the balcony"?


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    Re: proofreading

    "We offer to our guests an around-the-clock reception and check-out services."

    Can I say: "We offer around-the-clock reception and check-out services," "We offer reception and check-out services 24 hours a day" or "Guests can receive around-the-clock reception and check-out services"?


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    #9

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    Of your three alternatives, the first is the best.

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