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    in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire

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    Are these sentnces below a kind of inversion? Are they right? Please help me corrcet and show me the mistake.

    By accidence in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire with black smoke covering.

    At that time, in streets there appeared a forest of red flags.

    Thanks much.

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    Re: in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire

    "By accident in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire with black smoke covering."
    This is a little bit garbled. With a Verb-Subject inversion, "a column of fire" is the subject, right?

    a) Something or someone else must throw up "a column of fire". A person "throws up" or vomits, but a column of fire does not "throw up".

    b) with black smoke cover. I think that's what you mean. A cover of black smoke? What created this cover?

    c) "By accident": do you mean (1) "accidentally", "without intention" (adverb), or do you want to say (2) a traffic accident (noun) happened on the bridge? I'll assume it's (2). That's great: the accident threw up the column of fire and created the cover of smoke.

    Therefore:

    An accident in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire and covered everything with black smoke.

    An accident in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire, covering everything with black smoke.

    An accident in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire, and created a cover of black smoke.

    At that time, in the streets there appeared a forest of red flags.
    Yes, there are several inversions here. That's a very good sentence.

    Alex
    Last edited by abaka; 22-Jan-2009 at 03:09. Reason: small changes to wording

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    Re: in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire

    1) At that time, in the streets there appeared a forest of red flags. Tks for this.

    2) "By accident in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire with black smoke covering."
    You misunderstood me!

    The situation is that the soldiers were on the way to the enemy basis when suddenly they saw a column of fire which covered by black smoke rising up in the middle of the bridge.

    a column of fire is subject
    By accident: Suddenly
    covering here I want to say : black smoke covered the column of fire

    So can I correct it:
    In a sudden, in the middle of the bridge rose up a column of fire with black smoke covering

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    Re: in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire

    Use as few words as possible!

    rose up --> rose
    All of a sudden --> suddenly (your word!)
    smoke over/"covering" fire --> smoke is always above the flames!

    Suddenly in the middle of the bridge rose a column of fire and black smoke.

    (Good inversion, by the way. But as a rule, use this device very sparingly.)

    Alex

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    Re: in the middle of the bridge threw up a column of fire

    You are very nice of helping me. Thanks so much

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