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  1. Vincent Chan
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    Is this sentence correct?

    "Do you want to buy something in Hong Kong but you live overseas?
    We can do the shopping for you."

    Thank You!!

  2. comicer
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    I'm not a teacher; but I have some suggestions:

    "Do you want" sounds not so polite. I'd rather use "Would you like" or "Do you like".

    I think "but you live overseas" is redundant in the sentence because the listener already knew where he/she are living.

    Maybe we can add "without travelling" to highlight the point:
    Would you like to buy something in Hong Kong without travelling personally?

    How about "We can shop for you."?

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    Re: Is this sentence correct?

    Grammatically, those sentences are fine. As for style issues, that is something else.

    Perhaps: "Do you think you might like to buy something in Hong Kong, but you don't want to have to travel to Hong Kong? We can save you a trip. We'll do the shopping for you."

    :)

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    "Do you want to buy something in Hong Kong but live overseas?
    We can do the shopping for you."

    You can delete the second 'you', which sounds better to me.

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    Re: Is this sentence correct?

    "We'll do the shopping" seems somehow unfinished. How about: "We'll do the shopping, and you save money."


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