I am writing to express my interest in the post of “Entwickler Embedded Systems”, advertised at Find Jobs. Build a Better Career. Find Your Calling. | Monster.comI am writing with the intention of expressing my concern and interest in the post for “Entwickler Embedded Systems”, advertised at Find Jobs. Build a Better Career. Find Your Calling. | Monster.com
"Expressing your concern" is something you would write if you were upset about something they were doing.
You have a sentence as large as a paragraph. It is unreadable. You must break the sentence up. When enumerating a list such as A and B and C, only use 'and' for the last item. So A, B, and C.I am certain to say that my study and experience in design and development of both hardware and software of Embedded Systems, hand on experience with short range communications e.g. Zigbee, Bluetooth and Wi-Fi and sensor networks, and understanding of interoperability protocols e.g. UPnP would add value in your team.
I have both theoretical and practical experience in the design and development of of Embedded Systems. This includes both hardware and software. I have 'hands on' experience of short range communications systems, Zigbee, Bluetooth, Wi-Fi, sensor networks etc. I also have a sound understanding of interoperability protocols e.g. UPnP. I believe that I would add value in your team.
You then go on to list ever more technologies that you know. Yet this makes your text difficult to read. I understand that you want to list everything so you show up in computerized searches, but this is bad style. You must write a letter in the same way you would talk to another person, not write lists. The recruiter has lots of letters to read and if one is boring they will throw it away and pick up the next letter. Recall that is just the covering letter. You can list all your technologies on the CV itself.
Student or Learner