please correct my letter and please give a score to my letter

[rezashena]

You are un happy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper in your letter
-explain where you live
-describe the problem
-give reasons why you do not want this development.




Dear sir,


I am writing to complain about developing the local airport. My name is Jack Anderson. I write this letter on behalf of my neighbors too.

we leave next to the airport, and we have several problems concerning this matter. Firstly, the noise of the airplanes always bothers the neighborhood. In addition, during the taking off or landing airplanes, our windows often vibrate. In addition to, the parking lot of the airport has not enough space so that many people parked their cars in front of the my neighbor s houses, and they often make so much traffic too. We already wrote a letter last year, but we have not received any responses yet. In spite of that I heard that the city manager devise a scheme for developing the airport.

As a matter of fact, we can not go with the manager to this matter, and if so our problems will extend. Above all, we realized that the mayor wants cut the trees around the airport and destroy the local park in order to develop the airport. I feel something should be done about that.

Please give this matter your immediate attention.



Yours truly,


Jack Anderson

[RonBee]

If you are sending a Letter to the Editor to the local paper you want it to be as articulate as possible.

I am writing to complain about developing the local airport.

should be:

I am writing to complain about plans to enlarge XXX Airport.

[RonBee]

If you are writing on behalf of your neighbors then those neighbors should sign the letter.

[RonBee]

Note that "unhappy" is one word.

[RonBee]

Try:

I am unhappy about plans to enlarge the airport. The noise will increase, and it is almost intolerable now.