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    correction of errors in text

    Hi fellow believers

    Please let me know whether the words in bold are correctly used? Is a comma needed after 'time'? Are there any other errors?

    Many thanks.


    This time, we have published the memorial photograph collection of our High Priestís visit as a memento of the ceremony for the first anniversary of the establishment of the Kaimyo-in and the inauguration of the Hokkeko Kaimyo-in Chapter. I shall be very pleased if this book enables you to recall your sense of gratitude to our former High Priest Nikken Shonin and our current High Priest Nichinyo Shonin, and inspires you to maintain your joy and determination that you made during the Ceremony and Kick-off Meeting.

    (Note: Kaimyo-in is the temple. Hokkeko is the title given to the believers.)

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    Re: correction of errors in text

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    Hi fellow believers

    Please let me know whether the words in bold are correctly used? Is a comma needed after 'time'?
    I would not put a comma there, but comma rules seem to change without notice. Are there any other errors?

    Many thanks.


    This time, we have published the memorial photograph collection of our High Priestís visit as a memento of the ceremony for the first anniversary of the establishment of the Kaimyo-in and the inauguration of the Hokkeko Kaimyo-in Chapter. I shall be very pleased if this book enables you to recall your sense of gratitude to our former High Priest Nikken Shonin and our current High Priest Nichinyo Shonin, and inspires you to maintain your joy and determination that you made [you will be pleased if the book inspires the readers to 'maintain your joy and the level of determination you experienced] during the Ceremony and Kick-off Meeting.

    (Note: Kaimyo-in is the temple. Hokkeko is the title given to the believers.)
    All best wishes,

    Petra

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    Re: correction of errors in text

    Thanks, Pyoung.

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