A basic pass, correcting the grammar.
I’m applying for the Socrates/Erasmus programme as a first-year student of the full-time International Studies on the first cycle. My first option is Universidade Nova de Lisboa and the second is Aristotle University of Thessaloniki.
Studying abroad has always been my wish. I consider it as a challenge and an opportunity to explore and identify ways of improving myself. Travels, international relations and history are my biggest interests ,which I am trying to develop. I believe that visiting a new country, meeting new people and discovering new experiences is the best way to develop myself and discover
anew ways of thinking.
PortugalThe Portuguese and Greek languages, and cultures, are not very popular in my homeland but I find them very interesting. Portugal is a country of well-known sailors and discoverers. Those people spread PortugalPortuguese culture and language from Macao to Brazil, so Portugalthe Portuguese language is a key not only to Portugal but also to other countries and cultures. Greece is the cradle of European culture. Meeting Greek cultural heritage would be a great adventure and opportunity to broaden my knowledge.
Living and studying abroad has benefits that I could not achieve by a short visit alone. It will allow me to broaden my perspective and contribute to my personal development. Additionally, this scholarship would allow me to interact with students from all over the globe who may
studybe studying the same programme, thus I will benefit from an enlarged circle of friends and contacts. I consider it as a challenge and an opportunity which certainly will enable me to open my mind.I dont really understand this. Maybe:I’m applying for the Socrates/Erasmus programme as a first-year student of the full-time International Studies on the first cycle.
I wish to apply for a placement on the Socrates/Erasmus programme with a view to attending the 'International Studies' course starting 2009.
Not smart. You have just got your application thrown in the trash bin. How do you think Thessaloniki will react when they see they are second best, you are insulting them. Lisbon will see your Greek comments and discard you too. If you cant even be bothered to write a letter to them alone, it means you are very lazy. You can only do this if you they wont see it, ie the program is administered by others.
I see an awful lot of what YOU want and what YOU are interested in, but what can you offer in return? Why select you if you are not going to contribute anything?
I would rewrite saying what you can offer. I would keep all the Portugal parts together and then go on to the Greece parts
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