Results 1 to 3 of 3
  1. Unregistered
    Guest
    #1

    Topic Sentence

    I have a paragraph that I need to make a topic sentence towards. I am having trouble trying to make one up. I need help please?
    Paragraph: Birdely Doggett as often at Grand Central Station with one roller skate which he managed to attach to the shoe of a man sleeping on a bench. When the fellow woke and stood up, he describe a brief, despearate semi-circle, clutched a woman shopper about the knees, dragged her and her bundles to the cold floor, and was attacked by her muzzled Scotty. Doggett, as always, was the first to lend a hand, helping the woman to her feet and turning to the man. "Where the hell's your other skate!" he demanded sharply. "That's what caused all the trouble." He took his skate off the victim's foot and disappeared into the crowd that had begun to gather. "What's the matter over there?" a small man asked him apprehensively. Doggett shrugged. "Oh, they found a woman with a ticking package," he said. The other man turned and left the station, missing the train he had told his wife he would take.

    The topic sentence that I came up with was: With the original intent of causing mischief on others, all ended up in obvious lies.

    Does this make sence? Please help!

  2. Charlie Bernstein's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jan 2009
    • Posts: 3,597
    #2

    Re: Topic Sentence

    This is a great scene! Comments:

    1. Work on the sense of the first sentence.

    2. A topic sentence is not needed.

    3. This is not one paragraph. You have several paragraphs joined together here.

    [I edit copy and have tutored college writing.]

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jan 2008
    • Posts: 2,944
    #3

    Re: Topic Sentence

    Do you mean you need to come up with a summary sentence? (main thought of the paragraph?)

    Your summary was well written.

Similar Threads

  1. mixed sentence structure
    By Unregistered in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 01-Jan-2008, 03:01
  2. Topic Sentence
    By Joni_cabrera in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 22-Jun-2006, 05:51
  3. Attributive Clause - China Needs Your Help
    By ChinaDavid in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: 09-Jan-2005, 16:56
  4. Topic Sentence
    By Unregistered in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 27-Nov-2004, 12:15
  5. grammar
    By jiang in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 8
    Last Post: 17-Dec-2003, 20:02

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •