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  1. Unregistered
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    I need help...please help me correct.

    1) His upbringing have shaped his mentality, so i know how his mentality come about.
    2) His mentality was shaped by his upbringing.
    3) I know why the serial killer has this mentality.

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    Re: I need help...please help me correct.

    Quote Originally Posted by Unregistered View Post
    1) His upbringing has shaped his mentality, so I know how his mentality came about. This is wordy and a little redundant.
    2) His mentality was shaped by his upbringing. Much better: clear and to-the-point.
    3) I know why the serial killer has this mentality. Fine, but I'd go with #2.


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