Hi I just read through your work. I think it is about 4 minutes long just take your time when reading making it clear. Here are some of the corrections I thought - hope it's a help.
Every year over 7.6 million people in the world die of cancer. (My teacher's name) my fellow classmates and I will be talking about a band known worldwide who have taken great measures to help out the world. This band is called Simple Plan. They started out as any other band; small and unknown. They are associated with the Leucan Foundation and they founded the Simple Plan foundation in order to help out teenagers who are having problems.
Simple Plan is made up of 5 guys from Montreal who decided they wanted to try themselves in the music industry. The group formed in 1999 is: Pierre the lead singer, Chuck the drummer, Jeff the lead guitarist, Seb the guitarist, and David the bassist. They used to tour around in Pierre's dad's beat up ambulance with sofas in the back. Before they formed the band one of them used to be a janitor at his high school. Today they are known worldwide and go on tour everywhere they have even been known to have travelled as far as Japan a couple of times.
Jay, Pierre's brother was diagnosed with cancer and suffered for two years before managing to over come it. It was then that Simple Plan decided it was time they did something not only help his brother but to help all cancer patients and their families. Because of this they became associated with the Leucan foundation. Last Saturday, they gave a concert at Ski Bromont. It was a non-profitable concert and all the money raised from the tickets will go to the foundation. Last year the foundation raised 167 000 dollars. This year however, when Simple Plan went to Bromont, the Foundation raised 300 000 dollars almost twice as much as last year. The group doesn't do concerts for the money they do it for the fans who have supported them and to help out other people.
In December 2005 they founded the Simple Plan foundation to help many different people who have problems from typical teenagers problems such as deppression,suicide and drugs to helping out the South East Asia tsunami victims. They decided that with this foundation they could try and give something back to the community for helping succeed.
Like every other band they started out small, but they grew and became known worldwide. They don't just cancel concerts because they have the opportunity of making an appearance on TV. They have big hearts and they take the time to listen to every individual. They are big on helping people and try to make the world a better place to live in.Sometimes life isn't only about the fame and money, it's also about helping people and supporting those in need. They are always there for their fans Pierre once said "People that hate our band (Simple Plan), they will never hate enough to make me stop, they don't phase me. I love what I do so much and they will never stop me from doing it. No matter how loud they scream, I will scream louder and I will always be there for the people that love us."
Do you think it would last at least 4 minutes long?
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