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    #1

    Check My Sentence Please

    Friendship between men and women is impossible; passion, enmity, worship, love, but never friendship.


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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Hmm. A latter-day Oscar Wilde-ism.
    Firstly, think about the difference between:
    The bond between a man and his dog is...
    and
    The bond between men and dogs is...

    Secondly, there's how to punch your aphorism home, using punctuation:

    Friendship between ......... is impossible. Full stop. You've stated a bald premise.

    Then hit them with the humour:
    Passion, enmity, worship, love, but never friendship. (With the minimum of punctuation necessary, and without any particular emphasis, so that it remains 'dry humour'. Compare:
    Friendship between ........ is impossible. Passion, enmity, worship, love, but never friendship.
    or
    ...but never friendship.

    It needs to be tossed off as if a clichéd truism, not seem an attempt to persuade people as to the truth of your conviction.
    Last edited by David L.; 01-Apr-2009 at 18:22.


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    #3

    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    The content is contestable.


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    #4

    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    svartnik: The content is contestable.

    Further grounds for agreement that 'friendly' relations between both sexes, and perhaps even among the two sexes, is fraught.

    I think you mean something like:
    The assertion is questionable.

    Understand, Volcano is tapping into English humour, if not, indeed, perhaps translating his thoughts, from his language into mine; and so at least we, if not our nations also, share the same sense of dry humour.
    Last edited by David L.; 01-Apr-2009 at 18:39.

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