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    When narrating a story in the past simple, can we use the present perfect or stick only to the past perfect for tense consistency, as in the following excerpt:

    " Alan hadn't seen his uncle for two years. His uncle was pat seventy now (is it convenient to use "now" in the past tense?), and Alan noticed that age had left its traces on his face more than anytime before. He carried on the talking precisely as he had planned, but noticed that his words had no effect on his uncle any longer as if he weren't hearing him"

    Does this passage have verb consistency?


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    Re: Narrating a story in the past


    When narrating a story in the past simple, can we use the present perfect or stick only to the past perfect for tense consistency, as in the following excerpt:

    " Alan hadn't seen his uncle for two years. His uncle was pat seventy now (is it convenient to use "now" in the past tense?), and Alan noticed that age had left its traces on his face more than anytime before. He carried on the talking precisely as he had planned, but noticed that his words had no effect on his uncle any longer as if he weren't hearing him"

    Does this passage have verb consistency?

    "Alan hadn't seen his uncle for two years. His uncle was past seventy by then (is it convenient to use "now" in the past tense?), and Alan noticed that age had left its traces on his face more than at anytime before. He carried on the talking precisely as he had planned, but

    noticed that his words had no effect on his uncle any longer :
    noticed that his words had no effect on his uncle
    or
    noticed that his words no longer had any effect on his uncle

    as if he weren't hearing him."

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