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    Question Please proofread

    Hi,
    I've written an advertisement for an English Language Institute. Please anyone proofread it and point out my mistakes. Here are some parts of the Ad.
    " Silver Langauge Valley brings a trenemdious opportunity for the residents of Orangi Town to enhance their life-long learning and enrich their English through a unique system of English Langauge Teaching programme."


    "We offer superb packages of English Language for students, teachers, office workers and professionals. Get yourself registered and experience the difference."

    Thanks a million


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    Re: Please proofread

    Quote Originally Posted by dawoodusmani View Post
    Hi,
    I've written an advertisement for an English Language Institute. Please anyone proofread it and point out my mistakes. Here are some parts of the Ad.
    " Silver Langauge Valley brings a trenemdious opportunity for the residents of Orangi Town to enhance their life-long learning and enrich their English through a unique system of English Langauge Teaching programme."


    "We offer superb packages of English Language for students, teachers, office workers and professionals. Get yourself registered and experience the difference."

    Thanks a million
    You must check your typing carefully!

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    Re: Please proofread

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    You must check your typing carefully!
    Thanks for proofreading. It seems to me that I only made typing mistake (in my thread) but made no grammatical mistakes. Am I right?

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    Re: Please proofread

    Hi dawoodusmani
    (I love how your name reads.)

    I've written an advertisement for an English Language Institute. Please, anyone, proofread it and point out my mistakes. Here is a part of the ad.
    "Silver Language Valley brings a tremendous opportunity to the residents of Orangi Town that will enhance their life-long learning and enrich their English through a unique system of English Language Teaching programms."
    ...

    "We offer superb English language packages for students, teachers, office workers and professionals. Register and experience the difference."

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    Re: Please proofread

    Quote Originally Posted by Soup View Post
    Hi dawoodusmani
    (I love how your name reads.)

    I've written an advertisement for an English Language Institute. Please, anyone, proofread it and point out my mistakes. Here is a part of the ad.
    "Silver Language Valley brings a tremendous opportunity to the residents of Orangi Town that will enhance their life-long learning and enrich their English through a unique system of English Language Teaching programms."
    ...

    "We offer superb English language packages for students, teachers, office workers and professionals. Register and experience the difference."
    Many thanks for the appreciation and a bundle of thanks for your help.

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    Re: Please proofread

    Quote Originally Posted by dawoodusmani View Post
    Many thanks for the appreciation and a bundle of thanks for your help.
    You're most welcome. You made me smile with "a bundle of thanks".

    By the way, 'appreciation' doesn't fit the context; i.e., you didn't do/accomplish anything. What about, complement; e.g., Many thanks for the complement? That fits.

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    Re: Please proofread

    Quote Originally Posted by Soup View Post
    You're most welcome. You made me smile with "a bundle of thanks".

    By the way, 'appreciation' doesn't fit the context; i.e., you didn't do/accomplish anything. What about, complement; e.g., Many thanks for the complement? That fits.
    I'm very weak in using of words in an appropriate manner. Well, I doubt in your last sentence. Is it complement or compliment?

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    Re: Please proofread

    Hi dawoodusmani,

    May I suggest the following? :

    Quote Originally Posted by dawoodusmani
    "Silver Langauge Valley brings a trenemdious tremendous opportunity for the residents of Orangi Town to enhance their life-long learning and enrich their practical English language skills through a our unique system of English Langauge Language Teaching. programme.."

    "We offer superb packages of our English Language programme for students, teachers, office workers, and professionals. Get yourself registered and experience the difference."

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    Re: Please proofread

    Quote Originally Posted by dawoodusmani View Post
    I'm very weak in using of words in an appropriate manner. Well, I doubt in your last sentence. Is it complement or compliment?
    I am so used to using the word complement as a grammatical term that I've forgotten how to spell compliment.

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