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    Lying on my back on the grass...

    Hello.

    Lying on my back on the grass in the forest, I saw through the tree tops some clouds moving slowly in the sky.

    Are there any errors in this sentence?

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    Re: Lying on my back on the grass...

    Perhaps it is unusual to put the adverbial phrase "through the tree tops" after the subject and verb, yet before the object, in such cases. But it is not an actual error in my view.

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    Re: Lying on my back on the grass...

    I think (agreeing with the previous post) that it is acceptable when the object is reasonably long and emphatic - as it often is with objects of "see".

    I can see right out my window, walking down the street, my girl with another guy....

    (Van Morrison)

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    Re: Lying on my back on the grass...

    In songs and poetry, anything goes, so we can't really deduce norms from them.

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    Re: Lying on my back on the grass...

    I wasn't deducing, just exemplifying.

    There is more on this, if anybody is interested, in the Wikipedia.


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    Re: Lying on my back on the grass...

    "Lying on my back on the grass in the forest, I saw through the tree tops some clouds moving slowly in the sky."

    Could you make this sentence better?

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