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    Improvement of text

    You must think we should think of how to we live our lives before we think of how to die. But, I think in order for us to live meaningfully, we should think of how we should die.

    The word 'think' is repeated and repeated. Could some member please help me re-phrase so that the word is used less often to improve the text?

    Many thanks.

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    Re: Improvement of text

    I'm not a teacher...

    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    You must think we should think of how to we live our lives before we think of how to die. But, I think in order for us to live meaningfully, we should think of how we should die.

    The word 'think' is repeated and repeated. Could some member please help me re-phrase so that the word is used less often to improve the text?

    Many thanks.

    You would think that one would have to consider how to live before contemplating how to die. But, I think in order for us to live meaningful lives, we must first contemplate how we should die.
    Last edited by opa6x57; 10-Jul-2009 at 02:10. Reason: oops - forgot to add that I'm not a teacher....

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