[Idiom] a better self

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Do the sentences below make sense? How can I make them sound natural? Which is better?


  1. As the years go on, no matter how many goals we have achieved, we’ll meet a better self in the future.
  2. As the years go by, no matter how many dreams we have fulfilled, we’ll become a better self in the future.
  3. As time goes by, no matter how many dreams we have achieved, we’ll make ourselves a better person.
 
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Your sentences read as if you become a better person despite "goals achieved", "dreams fulfilled", or "dreams achieved".

To rephrase your #2 example, 'I will become a better self, even if I do fulfill my dreams.' I'm pretty sure that's not what you mean.
 

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Please change only one part of a sentence if you want our opinion of which version is better.
 

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I'm confused, so I rephrase them as follows. Do they make sense?

1. As the years go by, no matter how many dreams we've fulfilled, we'll see a better self.
2. With the passage of time, no matter how many dreams we've fulfilled, we'll meet a better self.
 

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I'm confused, so I rephrase them as follows. Do they make sense?

1. As the years go by, no matter how many dreams we've fulfilled, we'll see a better self.
2. With the passage of time, no matter how many dreams we've fulfilled, we'll meet a better self.

GoesStation asked you to change just one​ part of a sentence if you want us to choose. You have changed both the first part and the last part in sentence 2.
 

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As the years go by, no matter how many dreams we have fulfilled, we’ll meet a better self in the future.
 

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It still doesn't make sense to combine "no matter" with "better".

No matter how many dreams we fulfil, we'll still be disappointed.
If we fulfil all our dreams, we'll be better people in the future.

I don't understand what it is you think will make us better "selves".
 

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Ems is right about your logical error. What you are saying is "With time, we will all become better people." The "no matter" phrase can be dispensed with, logically, because you're saying it's irrelevant to the outcome anyway - unless you are making a specific point about the irrelevance of fulfilling dreams to becoming a better person.
 

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Your sentences read as if you become a better person despite "goals achieved", "dreams fulfilled", or "dreams achieved".

To rephrase your #2 example, 'I will become a better self, even if I do fulfill my dreams.' I'm pretty sure that's not what you mean.

The idea that one becomes a better person by virtue of fulfilling one's dreams is illogical and absurd.

As several recent and many historical examples show, one's dreams can be pernicious and evil. I shall refrain from naming my examples to keep the discussion focussed on English rather than politics.
 
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