A boss seeks control ...

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A boss seeks control; a leader embraces we.

Is it grammatical?
 

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By setting "we" in bold italics, you indicate that the reader should interpret it as a noun meaning "the idea of a group". This is not typical usage but it is possible. It would be better to use a few more words to phrase this more explicitly.
 

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I'd just change "we" to "collaboration" or "teamwork".
 

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When I first read it, I had no idea what it meant.
 

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Neither had I. That's why I posted ":?:".

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Nice selfie, Rover. ;-)
 

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I would aim for some sort of parallel idea in the two halves of the sentence. Maybe something like: A boss concentrates on "I"; a leader embraces "we".
 
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