A little girl sat on a jetty

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct. "lolly" is BrE for "lollipop" in AmE.

A little girl sat on a jetty, her feet dangling over the water, licking a lolly.
 

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That sounds like her feet were licking the lolly.
 

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Would this version be better?

A little girl sat on a jetty, licking a lolly, her feet dangling over the water.
 
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