Accept the job offer and ask for salary rise

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hampeh

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[FONT=&quot]Dear teachers and friends,

Here is the situation. Kindly please proof read my writing. Your kind assistance would be very much appreciated.[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]A couple of months ago, John turn down job offer from company A because at the same time, he also had another offer from company B. After considering both companies, John decided to work at company B. however, after 2 months working there, John found that the job is boring and didn’t match with his experience. Write a letter to company A asking whether they still can accept you there. Ask about the salary rising too.[/FONT]
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Accept offer as Engineer at company A[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Dear Michael, [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]The above matter is referred. Thank you for your kindness to offer me a job as Engineer at company A two months ago. After considering your offer carefully, I decided to accept the job.[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]As per our conversation with Michelle, she told me that my salary would be USD 2000. I’d be very much appreciated if you can raise the salary up to USD 3000.[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Your kind consideration would be very much appreciated.[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Best regards,[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]John[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Any better ideas, any comment? Thank you guys. [/FONT]
 

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This sounds like someone's homework. You know you must try yourself first or you will never learn.
 

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Hi Batfink, teachers and friends,


Thanks for your reply. By the way, this is not homework but the actual things that happened. Let say Company ABC offered you a position as Engineer. However, the salary that you requested during the interview is not fulfilled. Therefore, I’m planning to write an email to them asking for a little increment from what they offered. Is there any better way to write an email.? I already draft it as above, but I’m not sure whether the wording is correct or not.

Your advice on this matter would be highly appreciated. I look forward to hearing from you soon.



Thank you and best regards,
 

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What is not clear from all this is whether the company has actually offered you a job now.

If it has, and if during any interview you did not discuss the salary level, I think you are likely to have a problem. You can only suggest that maybe your experience warrants a slightly higher salary than that quoted originally. To be frank, if someone coming to me for a job at a quoted salary, was interviewed, offered a job and then asked for 50% more, I would be very unlikely to agree - and would probably dismiss them from consideration.

I suggest you think again about this email.
 

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Try:
Thank you for your kindness in offering me a job as an engineer at company A two months ago. After considering your offer carefully, I have decided to accept the job.
You can ask for a 50% raise before you have even been hired, but be prepared to have the job offer withdrawn. That is if it is still on the table. (Two months can be a long time. The position may have been filled by now.)

:)
 
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