[Grammar] adding detail using conjunctions or adverbs.

ambitious-girl

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hi teachers,
If i want to add more detail to my previous sentence, which conjunction or adverb is more appropriate?


For example
: I work as a VoIP expert, which stands for voice over Internet protocol, in a computer firm. In fact or on the other hand I have been working in the Internet service provider for seven years in IT department.

I am not sure my choices can be good ones.


Please help me.

Thanks.
 
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Neither choice works well. I can't think of any natural filler words to use there - I'd just go on with the second sentence without any.
 

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Neither choice works well. I can't think of any natural filler words to use there - I'd just go on with the second sentence without any.
Thank you so much.
How about the revised versions?
I have been working as a VoIP expert in the Internet service provider company for seven years in IT department.

I have been working as a VoIP expert in IT department in the Internet service provider company for seven years.
 

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Not quite. Try I have been working as a VoIP expert in the IT department of an internet service provider for seven years.​ Can you think of another way to describe the job? "Expert" is not a term people normally apply to themselves, and doesn't tell the reader anything about what your actual duties were.
 

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I have been working as a VoIP expert in the IT department of an internet service provider for seven years.​
Thanks so much.
"Expert" is not a term people normally apply to themselves.

Really? I didn't know about this term.

Can you think of another way to describe the job?
I don't know. I am not sure. What is an appropriate term?
Is VoIP specialist OK?
 
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