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Are these sentences correct:

1-They drug the animal and then capture it asleep.
2-They drug the animal and then capture it weakened.
3-They drug the animal and then capture it lying on the ground.

4-They attacked him alone. (when he was alone)
5-They attacked him asleep. (when he was asleep)

6-They talked to him alone. (when he was alone)

7-They moved toward him alone. (when he was alone)
 

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1-They drug the animal and then capture it asleep.

Not good. Try:

  • They dragged the animal, and then they captured it while it was asleep.

2-They drug the animal and then capture it weakened.

Try:

  • They drugged the animal, and then they captured it while it was in a weakened state.

3-They drug the animal and then capture it lying on the ground.

Try:

  • They drugged the animal, and then they captured it while it was lying on the ground.

4-They attacked him alone. (when he was alone)

No. You shouldn't need alone there in any case. The context of a story should supply the necessary details. Example:

  • He was walking through the alley by himself when they attacked him.

Or:

  • They waited for him as he walked down the alley by himself. When he saw them they attacked him.

5-They attacked him asleep. (when he was asleep)

No. Try:

  • They attacked him while he slept.

6-They talked to him alone. (when he was alone)

That's not so bad, but who was alone--him or them? Ask yourself if you really need alone there.

7-They moved toward him alone. (when he was alone)

No, you can't use that. In any case, the context of a story should supply the important details. Don't try to do everything with one sentence.

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